Hey Guys. I'm back to shamelessly promote my new song "Feel Weird" I just put out. Would appreciate any feedback and hopefully you all like it and give it a listen. I've got three more songs coming out this summer, so if you like it please follow on any of my socials. My instagram is @izmurph too. Here is the Spotify Link: https://open.spotify.com/track/7kxigzjvZArAkMIq6HsZHq?si=522ed6ee77b340b7 Apple Music:https://music.apple.com/zm/album/feel-weird/1744166434?i=1744166435 SoundCloud: https://on.soundcloud.com/njF4tf8T4oyGvn8y9 YouTube:
love this man, sounds great. the lyrics had me thinking about my ex, so thumbs up for being mad relatable lol
feedback: if you can, -lower your voice in volume and pitch (enough so that your vibrato isn't coming through), -then slow it down, -uh also ditch the alt rock genre (this feels like a less groundbreaking weezer). You could do better with something a BIT more tv girl -scrap this down to like 2 minutes, should be easy... -Also there's 3 different solos? And they are channeling this j rock vibe (could just be the mixing or the type of guitar), which would be okay, if the drums aligned with that genre as well. -The transition from verse to chorus is kind of sudden, I think you need to have a pause between the first 4 verses and the pre-chorus, if you insist on keeping every other element of the song the same. -you've gotta change the drum groove during the bridge (I feel so weird, I want to make it clear...) -the bass needs to be a little louder. Actually, I think most of the solos would sound really good on the bass, with the repetition+ a little tweaking it'd sound more grunge and chill I promise I'm not trying to be a hater, if I sound rude let me know. I could also be totally wrong, if you like it how it is, disregard my silly notes
Are you mixing all the instruments or are you in a band? Genre is good; TV girl is i think its own thing and special in its own way. Great song, subbed and liked. Hope to hear something more slower in the future!
I just said TV girl bc I couldn't think of another group atm. I mean, yeah the genre is alright, like Eli said too. I was just suggesting another one. And I didn't say he should rip off TV girl or anything (I said a BIT more), I was trying to articulate that the lyrics aren't flowing that well (either because of the notes or the timing), and apparently failed. Upon listening again I also wanna say that the chorus is a little monotone (I'm not saying it's terrible or anything guys). I really do think you should take out that first solo. Maybe just do a 2 measure break or something. And the first verse specifically, it's like I can see you writing the lyrics in a little notepad. I'm falling...down can't see the..what rhymes with down... ground! again: everything is just a suggestion + I swear I'm not hating lol, if Coffee said he didn't want any feedback I wouldn't say anything
Haha yeah kinda what I wrote it about. Thanks for listening. Thank you Eli. If I remember right you're really into heavy metal I think but glad you like it. Thank you! Thanks man! I appreciate the feedback. Some of the stuff I personally would keep the same, like I think for it to sound like TV Girl I would have to write a completely new song tbh. And then I don't really get what you mean about the transition too as there's a drum fill and a guitar strum pattern leading into the Chorus. But I get what you're saying about the drums in the bridge could be different. And then for your other comment I wasn't proud of writing down so many times but I had written the lyrics a while ago and then played the song live a couple of times, so I just couldn't think of anything to change it with. But honestly I liked the line "It's a long way down, when you're lost and never found." so it's just a preference and difference of opinion I feel. I can sorta get how you could hear monotone in the chorus but I thought it was catchy so again, I think it's just like not everyone is gonna like it but I think it works for the song. Thanks for the feedback tho, I do appreciate you taking time out of your day to give constructive criticism. I played everything but the drums which a local producer who helped me with the mixing played. Thanks for the subscription! I have three more songs I'm going to be dropping that were recorded at the same time, so stay tuned haha! One of them is more of a slower ballad type song.
